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Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Sep 13, 2011 1:15 am
by DaughterofEve1792
Well, Susan's diary as written by me that is... :p
Even though Susan denies Narnia and Aslan, saying they were just "games", I don't think she believed that with all her heart. I imagine that every once in a while, when no one was watching, she let her guard down, and the memories resurfaced momentarily.
Lyrics are from "Invisible" by Skylar Grey.

http://i1045.photobucket.com/albums/b45 ... ader-1.jpg

Comments and critique are very welcome! :)

Re: Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Sep 13, 2011 8:48 am
by wild rose
absolutely wonderful, the words are really fitting, I like how Susan is black and white and her reflection is colorful, excellent work :ymapplause: :ymapplause:

Re: Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Sep 13, 2011 9:54 pm
by Lion's Emblem
Another nice graphic to your credit DaughterofEve1792. I like your concept on this one. You've chosen a nice pairing between text and imagery. I particularly like the flow between the bottom mirror images in connection with the text. The flow is perfect- how Susan appears content ("I pretend that I'm a queen") and slowly, almost fades into the looks of doubt ("and it's almost believable"). This effect works really well with Susan's character and your concept. She only allows herself to be content for a brief amount of time before she brings herself back to her reality. The flow in Susan's facial expressions says it all- I can't say it enough. Really nice work here. I agree with wild rose on your choice of coloration. It works well conceptually. Maybe it's a bit cliche, but I could also see the bottom images changing coloration as well as Susan's expression changes (which could also be taken into consideration with the text). I'm not entirely sure on the overall layout of the piece. Does it work? Absolutely. Is it as strong as it could be? Personally, I'm not sure (but I do believe it's subjective). I can see the first two mirror images being placed at the top of the piece, followed by the grayscale image of Susan (as it is now), followed by the last two mirror images. To me, this seems to read more with the text. I'm certainly not saying that it's right though (afterall, in this format you do lose the flow of expression change, so.... it might just be something to play around with if you ever feel the urge or desire).

A great concept with superb text and imagery to match. Nice work :ymapplause: .

Re: Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Sep 14, 2011 7:23 am
by Narnian_Archer
Really like this graphic, DaughterofEve1792. The images at the bottom really convey the feeling of Susan looking back into her days in Narnia. The words also match very well. Love the feel of it!! :ymapplause:

Re: Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Oct 02, 2011 11:00 pm
by Adeona
A very nice WP! The text is perfect! Very much Susan. You chose a good font, as well. I would suggest that the lower row of images would benefit from being "Harder looking" - maybe higher contrast?
But I really like your work! :ymapplause:

Re: Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Oct 04, 2011 2:05 pm
by Quinlin
Great job, DaughterofEve1792! :) You came up with a great idea for this wallie and put it together very nicely. Bringing in the contrast between the black and white picture and the row of images on the bottom was an excellent choice. It creates so much more of a poignant effect and really depicts Susan's struggles as she looses her faith in Narnia. The quotation is perfect for this and I really like the font you chose. My only comment is that I think maybe the the last part of the quote at the bottom should be white as well. I don't mind the color, but it's just a thought.

As you say, I also like to think that Susan does remember Narnia and that somewhere still inside her, she goes back to it.

As I said, lovely! :ymapplause:

Re: Susan's diary -- graphic

PostPosted: Oct 04, 2011 2:30 pm
by Liberty Hoffman
ooh, that's epic! :D I love the pictures you chose and the lyrics are perfect and the coloring is awesome! :D :D keep up the good work!